OMG HER STORY WAS EPIC, AWESOME, JAW-DROPPING, SPECTACULAR, BLA BLA BLA!! While searching for grammar mistakes, I kept thinking of my own story and the - cough - plentiful mistakes I probably made.
I didn't really suggest a lot of content changes as the original SHOULDN'T BE CHANGED OR I'M GONNA GET VIOLENT. Just kidding, just kidding. Sort of.
Every time I peer edit, it makes me more aware of changes I need to make or how I can improve. It also makes me ecstatic to know I'm helping someone out. Even if it's Lea. Nah, just kidding. I liked helping her out a lot because she's my best friend!! Yay best friends!! :D
It's also fun to know that what you're looking at is not the finished project but a masterpiece in the making. Exciting! And it always makes me happy to see people taking my advice and making changes. NINJA GLOMP! Don't ask.
That's all for now, folks! Catch you on the flip side!
Friday, July 23, 2010
Pre-Peer Editing
Okay, just a heads up for everyone.
I'm just about to peer edit my 2nd short story and I'm super excited! I predict peer editing will go smoothly, with tons of helpful advice. I hope to improve my story ten-fold and help others, perhaps?
I'm just about to peer edit my 2nd short story and I'm super excited! I predict peer editing will go smoothly, with tons of helpful advice. I hope to improve my story ten-fold and help others, perhaps?
The Universe's Got Talent :D
Host: Hello everyone and welcome to The Universe's Got Talent! Today we have five new contestants, all of which are very unique. Before starting, let's get to know our players more starting with the tallest giant-of-a-man, Henry!
APPLAUSE
Host: So Henry, if you could describe yourself in one word, what would it be?
Henry: G-rated.
Host: Ah, okay... It says here that you're an amazing artist. What do you like to draw?
Henry: Boats. I'm an extraordinary sailor who loves the feel of the salty breeze against my back. I also enjoy sunsets.
Host: Here that ladies? This guy is passionate about life! So for the girls out there, are you single.
Henry: ....
Host: Hello? Are you dating anyone?
Henry: I don't date.
Host: Really? How come?
Henry: It's such a boring routine. The same old thing every single time.
Host: Oh, so you believe it's too common for you?
Henry: In a way, yes.
Host: Tell us, how do you feel most of the time? Happy? Sad? Vengeful?
Henry: Hungry.
Host: Ha ha ha, there he goes again folks! This guy is just too much. So Henry, when you're not drawing, what do you like to do?
Henry: I read. A lot.
Host: Can't get enough of those books, eh? What kind of books do you prefer?
Henry: Picture books.
Host: ... Next question: What do people usually say when they first meet you?
Henry: ...
Host: Hello? I said: What are peoples' first impressions of you?
Henry: I just told you: ....
Host: No comment? They don't say anything?
Henry: Exactly.
Host: I see... You're a very comedic guy, Henry.
Henry: I know.
Host: ... *clears throat* Well that's all from Henry, folks! Now onto the next contestant...
APPLAUSE
Host: So Henry, if you could describe yourself in one word, what would it be?
Henry: G-rated.
Host: Ah, okay... It says here that you're an amazing artist. What do you like to draw?
Henry: Boats. I'm an extraordinary sailor who loves the feel of the salty breeze against my back. I also enjoy sunsets.
Host: Here that ladies? This guy is passionate about life! So for the girls out there, are you single.
Henry: ....
Host: Hello? Are you dating anyone?
Henry: I don't date.
Host: Really? How come?
Henry: It's such a boring routine. The same old thing every single time.
Host: Oh, so you believe it's too common for you?
Henry: In a way, yes.
Host: Tell us, how do you feel most of the time? Happy? Sad? Vengeful?
Henry: Hungry.
Host: Ha ha ha, there he goes again folks! This guy is just too much. So Henry, when you're not drawing, what do you like to do?
Henry: I read. A lot.
Host: Can't get enough of those books, eh? What kind of books do you prefer?
Henry: Picture books.
Host: ... Next question: What do people usually say when they first meet you?
Henry: ...
Host: Hello? I said: What are peoples' first impressions of you?
Henry: I just told you: ....
Host: No comment? They don't say anything?
Henry: Exactly.
Host: I see... You're a very comedic guy, Henry.
Henry: I know.
Host: ... *clears throat* Well that's all from Henry, folks! Now onto the next contestant...
Space Universe Talent
What up people?
I'd just like to take a moment to describe myself in six words.
Hard-hitting: This relates to my humor and my personality. My jokes are sometimes tongue-in-cheek and/or so random you feel like you've been smacked in the face with a waffle. In terms of my personality, people say I'm blunt. I don't mean to be, yet I come out that way. I sometimes can't help speaking my mind, hehehe.... Besides from - ah - speaking my mind, I'm an outgoing person. I like to succeed at things well or not try at all. I know, I'm WAY too competitive. Sob.
War: My imagination is occasionally violent, according to a CERTAIN SOMEONE. Cough. I just like action, yah know? Plus it's fun to weave in a little "hard-hitting" humor into violence. Makes it more interesting. Besides from my imagination, I'm not really a violent person. I don't know much about the war in Iraq, just the basics. I don't understand politics too well, I leave that to other people, like Greg. Me no likey politics.
Stability: I guess I'm stable in my personality. If you don't believe me, think of it this way: sometimes I'm immature, other times I'm mature. Comprende? Yes I like to act like a little kid every once in a while but I'm pretty sure I'm more mature than most teens at my school. Cough.
Yummy: I like food! I love cooking it, baking it, tasting it, smelling it, etc. It's so fun and fascinating. I'm thinking of becoming a registered dietitian when I grow up, so I think this word applies to me nicely. I don't really want to use it for anything but food, as that would be weird.
Big Brother: Hehehe... Well, I'm not a guy but I feel like I have a big sister quality to me. I'm good at comforting people and making my friends smile. I'm the type of person you come to for personal talk, ranting, etc. but also someone that can make you laugh when you want to cry. At least, I HOPE I can do that.
Allergies: I'm allergic to annoying people?
I'd just like to take a moment to describe myself in six words.
Hard-hitting: This relates to my humor and my personality. My jokes are sometimes tongue-in-cheek and/or so random you feel like you've been smacked in the face with a waffle. In terms of my personality, people say I'm blunt. I don't mean to be, yet I come out that way. I sometimes can't help speaking my mind, hehehe.... Besides from - ah - speaking my mind, I'm an outgoing person. I like to succeed at things well or not try at all. I know, I'm WAY too competitive. Sob.
War: My imagination is occasionally violent, according to a CERTAIN SOMEONE. Cough. I just like action, yah know? Plus it's fun to weave in a little "hard-hitting" humor into violence. Makes it more interesting. Besides from my imagination, I'm not really a violent person. I don't know much about the war in Iraq, just the basics. I don't understand politics too well, I leave that to other people, like Greg. Me no likey politics.
Stability: I guess I'm stable in my personality. If you don't believe me, think of it this way: sometimes I'm immature, other times I'm mature. Comprende? Yes I like to act like a little kid every once in a while but I'm pretty sure I'm more mature than most teens at my school. Cough.
Yummy: I like food! I love cooking it, baking it, tasting it, smelling it, etc. It's so fun and fascinating. I'm thinking of becoming a registered dietitian when I grow up, so I think this word applies to me nicely. I don't really want to use it for anything but food, as that would be weird.
Big Brother: Hehehe... Well, I'm not a guy but I feel like I have a big sister quality to me. I'm good at comforting people and making my friends smile. I'm the type of person you come to for personal talk, ranting, etc. but also someone that can make you laugh when you want to cry. At least, I HOPE I can do that.
Allergies: I'm allergic to annoying people?
When Worlds Collide - COLLIDING!!!
The Wanderer had been living on an isolated glacier for six months now but he was growing tired of the scenery once more. Packing up his few things, the Wanderer looked over to see Johnny rolling around on the icy floor. The Wanderer grinned, amused by the silly sight of his Labrador spinning on the ground. Johnny always put on a show for the Wanderer on Moving Day as if to say, "It's alright, I'm here so don't feel sad." And the act constantly worked, improving the Wanderer's mood ten-fold.
The Wanderer positioned himself at his frozen table, examining a map of his world. It was a decent planet, not too big and not too small. The strange thing is every region is unique and impressively different from the rest.
Here came the fun part. The Wanderer took a deep breath and shut his eyes, waving his finger in the air before bringing it down on the map. Opening one eye first and then the other, the Wanderer looked down at his finger to see where his next six-month-home would be.
The Wanderer frowned in confusion. Birdtopia? What kind of name for a region is "Birdtopia"? He tried to suppress his giggle but failed.
Well, he decided while chuckling, I guess I have no choice but to move there.
Picking up his one suitcase, the Wanderer motioned to Johnny and brought out a gadget from his pocket. He tapped the screen a few times then typed in the name of his new destination. After familiarizing himself with the directions, the Wanderer reached for another tool in his opposite pocket, this time bringing out a single button. He pressed it and a whirring sound erupted in the distance. The Wanderer turned to the right as a ski boat approached his igloo. He hopped on it and looked at his former home one last time.
Shaking his head as if to shake off his worries, the Wanderer set the coordinates on his boat's main screen and grabbed onto the handles as it sped off.
The Wanderer positioned himself at his frozen table, examining a map of his world. It was a decent planet, not too big and not too small. The strange thing is every region is unique and impressively different from the rest.
Here came the fun part. The Wanderer took a deep breath and shut his eyes, waving his finger in the air before bringing it down on the map. Opening one eye first and then the other, the Wanderer looked down at his finger to see where his next six-month-home would be.
The Wanderer frowned in confusion. Birdtopia? What kind of name for a region is "Birdtopia"? He tried to suppress his giggle but failed.
Well, he decided while chuckling, I guess I have no choice but to move there.
Picking up his one suitcase, the Wanderer motioned to Johnny and brought out a gadget from his pocket. He tapped the screen a few times then typed in the name of his new destination. After familiarizing himself with the directions, the Wanderer reached for another tool in his opposite pocket, this time bringing out a single button. He pressed it and a whirring sound erupted in the distance. The Wanderer turned to the right as a ski boat approached his igloo. He hopped on it and looked at his former home one last time.
Shaking his head as if to shake off his worries, the Wanderer set the coordinates on his boat's main screen and grabbed onto the handles as it sped off.
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The Wanderer was confused. Birdtopia was not as he imagined it to be. There were enormous parrots and chickadees everywhere, lounging around like human kings and queens. What puzzled the Wanderer more were the crowds of pigs walking along the streets. They acted as if the birds were their overlords, as if they were terrified to get near. Shrugging in apathy, the Wanderer knew it was out of his hands, he had to live here.
When Worlds Collide - World #2
The Eskimo peered out of his igloo as a soft wind rippled the water. It was going to be cold again, thought the Eskimo as he retreated back into his igloo. Settling down on a chair made of ice, he sighed heavily.
Several years ago, the Eskimo - formally called the Sandman - grew tired of living in a beach house and decided to move somewhere colder. And now, five months after he had migrated to new scenery, the Eskimo was bored again. He had a reputation for being easily excitable yet hard to please. Every six months or so, the Wanderer - for that was his nickname in his town - would move to a different location, seeking new adventures.
In the long run he was a loser in the making, always failing at life wherever he went. But the Wanderer never minded, he actually enjoyed the challenge of finding a new home twice a year. Sometimes, however, he would become lonely. Always greeting new neighbors, always seeing something different out his window, never staying long enough to make friends.
You shouldn't pity the fellow for he had made one close friend who always stayed by his side: Johnny the puppy. Johnny was a faithful dog, never wanting to desert his owner for a more stable life. Personally, Johnny believed his life with the Wanderer to be fascinating.
Several years ago, the Eskimo - formally called the Sandman - grew tired of living in a beach house and decided to move somewhere colder. And now, five months after he had migrated to new scenery, the Eskimo was bored again. He had a reputation for being easily excitable yet hard to please. Every six months or so, the Wanderer - for that was his nickname in his town - would move to a different location, seeking new adventures.
In the long run he was a loser in the making, always failing at life wherever he went. But the Wanderer never minded, he actually enjoyed the challenge of finding a new home twice a year. Sometimes, however, he would become lonely. Always greeting new neighbors, always seeing something different out his window, never staying long enough to make friends.
You shouldn't pity the fellow for he had made one close friend who always stayed by his side: Johnny the puppy. Johnny was a faithful dog, never wanting to desert his owner for a more stable life. Personally, Johnny believed his life with the Wanderer to be fascinating.
When Worlds Collide - World #1
The parrots frowned as they watched little piglets go by. Tsk tsk, they thought, piglets are disgusting creatures with no intelligence whatsoever.
A mother hog with her young passed the group of giant parrots, watching them with a suspicious eye. You can't trust parrots, they're just too smart, thought the mother. She quickened the pace and scurried onto their destination.
While lounging on several branches in a maple tree, the parrots ate their food distractedly as they kept an eye on those worthless pigs. Even though the parrots had lots to do, they were content with their state of affairs. The birds had finally taken over the grassy planet, replacing spaces of grass with trees. This made the parrots very happy. They had been exiled from Earth long ago, due to - ah - issues with the humans. And now they could boss around the pigs, forcing them to offer gifts of fish as a form of taxes.
- Shelby
NOTE: I really didn't know where I was going with this... I APOLOGIZE!!
A mother hog with her young passed the group of giant parrots, watching them with a suspicious eye. You can't trust parrots, they're just too smart, thought the mother. She quickened the pace and scurried onto their destination.
While lounging on several branches in a maple tree, the parrots ate their food distractedly as they kept an eye on those worthless pigs. Even though the parrots had lots to do, they were content with their state of affairs. The birds had finally taken over the grassy planet, replacing spaces of grass with trees. This made the parrots very happy. They had been exiled from Earth long ago, due to - ah - issues with the humans. And now they could boss around the pigs, forcing them to offer gifts of fish as a form of taxes.
- Shelby
NOTE: I really didn't know where I was going with this... I APOLOGIZE!!
Wednesday, July 21, 2010
First Story Experience
Greetings, Earthlings!
I remember creating the first story like it was only yesterday... Wait a minute, it was four days ago. Anyway, I started out with a single fragment of an idea: my main character is a robot. As I continued to brainstorm, my thought process went something like this: Robot... A robot that doesn't know she's a robot... Her memories were replaced with fake ones... Once she remembers her past, she gets reactivated, changing back into a robot... AND DESTROYS THE SOLAR SYSTEM!
It was really fun creating a whole new world with strange characters and a BAM-IN-YO-FACE plot twist. I never really knew I could pull something off like that but apparently I can. That makes me happy! :)
So my strategy all along was to plan characters and exciting details first. I wasn't too sure about how to start my short story, as I was really bad at thinking of how to start my introductory paragraph. But then Mr. Kelly came to the rescue and told us to write FOUR DIFFERENT BEGINNINGS, EACH WITH A DIFFERENT STYLE! It was SO helpful and I really got into one of them, thus my beginning was born.
After that, I just wrote on the fly, keeping in mind where I want to end up, what mood I want to set and how to lull my readers into a sense of calm.
I remember creating the first story like it was only yesterday... Wait a minute, it was four days ago. Anyway, I started out with a single fragment of an idea: my main character is a robot. As I continued to brainstorm, my thought process went something like this: Robot... A robot that doesn't know she's a robot... Her memories were replaced with fake ones... Once she remembers her past, she gets reactivated, changing back into a robot... AND DESTROYS THE SOLAR SYSTEM!
It was really fun creating a whole new world with strange characters and a BAM-IN-YO-FACE plot twist. I never really knew I could pull something off like that but apparently I can. That makes me happy! :)
So my strategy all along was to plan characters and exciting details first. I wasn't too sure about how to start my short story, as I was really bad at thinking of how to start my introductory paragraph. But then Mr. Kelly came to the rescue and told us to write FOUR DIFFERENT BEGINNINGS, EACH WITH A DIFFERENT STYLE! It was SO helpful and I really got into one of them, thus my beginning was born.
After that, I just wrote on the fly, keeping in mind where I want to end up, what mood I want to set and how to lull my readers into a sense of calm.
First Writing Post!! xD
Ello people! Shelby here!
Welcome to my colorful blog I created for a summer program called CyTag. I'm really looking forward to using Blogger again, as I stopped using it for a while.
I'll be posting sketches and short stories periodically and I want YOU to comment. Well, actually, I'm FORCING you to comment whether you want to or not. HA FOOLS.
So yah, that's my first post. DON'T JUDGE ME!!! I know this post was random, but that's all right. :P
See you on the Dark Side,
Shelby :D
Welcome to my colorful blog I created for a summer program called CyTag. I'm really looking forward to using Blogger again, as I stopped using it for a while.
I'll be posting sketches and short stories periodically and I want YOU to comment. Well, actually, I'm FORCING you to comment whether you want to or not. HA FOOLS.
So yah, that's my first post. DON'T JUDGE ME!!! I know this post was random, but that's all right. :P
See you on the Dark Side,
Shelby :D
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